Monday, September 9, 2013

College Essay Draft

Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

          As you slightly and carefully turn the manual focus ring, your fingers and eyes working together to achieve perfect depiction, you get a more clear and crisp picture of the world. 
          Being apart of a somewhat nomadic family, due to my father’s enlistment in the military, I had been accustomed to moving around and adapting from place to place. It was actually quite stimulating, I enjoyed change and learning a new perspective, observing the differences and similarities between the communities I had previously resided in. Moving from place to place so often, I had always been on the outside-  watching, learning, trying to make sense of and comprehend the world around me. 
          Moving the position of the camera, you’re enabled to capture an endless amount of different angles. Each angle adding its own unique and individual sense to the overall piece, the different arrangement of angles allows a more accurate, interesting sight.
          I began to want more of a social purpose, entering my adolescent stage. Though I enjoyed the intellectual aspect of myself, I wanted to feel more included and involved within my community. I soon learned that moving from the outside to the inside of the social realm, helped me with my understanding of people and the why’s and how’s of society. When I was younger and wanted something to do, I would snatch one of my father’s thick psychology text books, and let my mind be engulfed by the science. But as I grew older I realized I can learn a lot by going out and actually experiencing what I had  been watching and reading for so long.
          Lighting is also a thing of importance, lighting provides a more visually appealing image. Too little lighting can make the quality dark and sketchy, too much can cause an over exposed image. The perfect setting of lighting can allow you to capture an image, in its most perfect profile.
          Having grown up all over the world to experience different places and people, and having a father who’s involved with psychology, psychology has been a field of my interest for as long as I can remember. My very nature seeks to understand those around me. Being relocated on several occasions, I’ve had to rely and grow on this sense of understanding, and its lead me to want to go and learn more about the field, and pursue a career in it. More specifically, I’d like to enter the field of neuropsychology, because I’d like to acquire a higher knowledge in the physical aspect of psychology as well. In short, psychology has played a rather important role in my life thus far, and I intend for it to grow into an even larger component of my life. It compliments my way of life, and fits just right, like a perfect picture.

3 comments:

  1. VERY CREATIVE WAY TO STRUCTURE YOUR ESSAY. HOWEVER YOU SHOULD TRY TO TIE IN THOSE DESCRIPTIONS OF CAMERA USE INTO YOUR PERSONAL DISCUSSION. FOR EXAMPLE, WHAT DOES CAMERA ANGLES HAVE TO DO WITH YOU BEING MORE SOCIAL? TRY TO TIE IT IN. TRY TO BE MORE DETAILED AND SPECIFIC AND HOW THE WORLD AFFECTED YOU. IT IS STILL VAGUE AND LOOKS AS IF THE ESSAY IS TRYING TO BE TOO "MIND-BLOWING" AND CREATIVE WITH ITS LANGUAGE BUT WE MISS THE PURPOSE. MS(3+)

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  2. I think you had good word choice and how your so specific. I also like how you related media to your life around the world.

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  3. I think your word choice is fabulous (like you), however, your essay sounds... stiff, to me. I don't really know how to explain it; it's like you're super uptight, using all these words. It sounds somewhat like you, but not really. I feel like you should loosen up a bit (just my opinion). Instead of coming from a psychology based perspective, maybe have more fun with it? I like how you related media terms to your essay though, it's pretty cool. Good job c:

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