Allusion Poem Final

kept away, guarded

the impressions that linger in my mind ever hidden in fear of being bombarded

new faces, places

ignite foundational sparks of thought

   for what Oh Captain My Captain fought

words collected, crafted

they'd go on for what's longer than what we'd ever lasted

   but still we'd have the favorable time to tell of our encountered sensations

reservation, own sanctum 

my last resort to which i can report, these words written down- my salvation at last found 

summer wind, whim

how the fragments of our minds carry on, and i'd pray that the days be far less grim

   the day'd be ours with our declared Carpe Diem!

to live, thrive

does the language of passion allow us to pursue, allow us to everlastingly woo

   and so we'd use this as we'd suck all of we could out of great life

clarity, sincerity 

in my present time of flaw and confusion, these rhymes serve to repair my contusions

individual notion, thought

shouldn't be so easily bought, isn't just a mere smear of old tattered brain gear

   this was all shared as well as found in our cave underground

only ours, exclusively

in no other's could you find what's going through my own mind

   like Todd we'd all have our thoughts odd

opened doors, so much more

does the art of words provide

   this kind of freedom Neil would try to strive

"O me, O life of the questions of these recurring. Of the endless trains of the faithless. Of cities filled with the foolish. What good amid these, O me, O life? Answer: that you are here. That life exists and identity. That the powerful play goes on, and you may contribute a verse."

allusion photoshop DRAFT

so what i was trying to get with this picture was a 'leave your own print onto the world' kinda thing, but uh ya no

Allusion Poem Draft

new faces, places
ignite foundational sparks of thought
   for what Oh Captain My Captain fought

words collected, crafted
they'd go on for what's longer than what we'd ever lasted
   but still we'd have the favorable time to tell of our encountered sensations

summer wind, whim
how the fragments of our minds carry on, and i'd pray that the days be far less grim
   the day'd be ours with our declared Carpe Diem!

to live, thrive
does the language of passion allow us to pursue, allow us to everlastingly woo
   and so we'd use this as we'd suck all of we could out of great life

individual notion, thought
shouldn't be so easily bought, isn't just a mere smear of old tattered brain gear
   this was all shared as well as found in our cave underground

only ours, exclusively
in no other's could you find what's going through my own mind
   like Todd we'd all have our thoughts odd

opened doors, so much more
does the art of words provide
   this kind of freedom Neil would try to strive

"O me, O life of the questions of these recurring. Of the endless trains of the faithless. Of cities filled with the foolish. What good amid these, O me, O life? Answer: that you are here. That life exists and identity. That the powerful play goes on, and you may contribute a verse."

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Angry Letter Final

120 21st Street

Honolulu, HI 96818

December 2, 2013

Hickam Communities Earheart Center

210 Kokomalei Street

Honolulu, HI 96818

Dear Hickam Communities,

I can honestly say that I have the great privilege of living in a community that is, overall, well kept and pleasurable. Living on base housing, I have the benefit of having a company look over the well-being of my community-- which is not something that a lot of people have the pleasure of receiving. 

Though grateful for this service, the housing maintenance department of the company doesn’t always meet the satisfaction and needs of residents. My family has personally had an experience with the maintenance department not doing their job right. 

A couple weeks ago, our water heater broke, leaving us with no hot water. Showering in the morning with freezing cold water wasn't something we enjoyed, so my father decided to call maintenance to get the problem fixed. When he called, he was told it wasn't an emergency, but they'd come to us in the hours between 1-5 pm. This was fine with my dad; as long as we had hot water for the next day, we were good. But help didn't arrive until 6:13. My dad took off of work early to make sure he was there when the maintenance guys arrived, but he might as well've stayed the day at work considering how late they were. However, their late arrival was not a mistake on their part. They were rushed out at last minute by their superiors, they were supposed to have the rest of the day off but instead they got this "last minute job". Fixing a water heater is not a quick and easy job- the maintenance workers were busy repairing the heater until 10 o'clock at night. Going past the great inconvenience this was to my family; this was also very unfair to the workers themselves. They deserve to be told in advance of the things they need to do, so they can do it properly. 

With my understanding there are about 15-20 maintenance workers operating within your facilities. With plenty of workers to get the job done, if scheduled properly, the issues residents have with maintenance could be resolved. On your website, it lists leakages as one of the top emergencies to be attended to by maintenance. Our water heater wasn’t working due to a leakage in the machine. If you all claim that leaks are in the top priority of maintenance, you should commit and attend to those you told were in priority.

Throughout this whole time, the workers themselves were cooperating well. Together they worked for hours in the back of my family's Lanai trying to complete a task they had little to no notice about. They apologized for being late and explained their supervisor's act of telling them on the spot.

I really do appreciate everything your company does for me, but I feel that communication amongst those in your work staff is something that should be improved. My community depends on your company for many of their residential needs- how your company functions as a whole has an enormous effect on the lives of the residents themselves.

Thanks for your time,

Brianna M. Martin-Ortega

Angry Letter

120 21st Street

Honolulu, HI 96818

December 2, 2013

Hickam Communities Earheart Center

210 Kokomalei Street

Honolulu, HI 96818

Dear Hickam Communities,

I can honestly say that I have the great privilege of living in a community that is, overall, well kept and pleasurable. Living on base housing, I have the benefit of having a company look over the well-being of my community-- which is not something that a lot of people have the pleasure of receiving. 

Though grateful for this service, the housing maintenance department of the company doesn’t always meet the satisfaction and needs of residents. My family has personally had an experience with the maintenance department not doing their job right. 

A couple weeks ago, our water heater broke, leaving us with no hot water. Showering in the morning with freezing cold water wasn't something we enjoyed, so my father decided to call maintenance to get the problem fixed. When he called, he was told it wasn't an emergency, but they'd come to us in the hours between 1-5 pm. This was fine with my dad; as long as we had hot water for the next day, we were good. But help didn't arrive until 6:13. My dad took off of work early to make sure he was there when the maintenance guys arrived, but he might as well've stayed the day at work considering how late they were. However, their late arrival was not a mistake on their part. They were rushed out at last minute by their superiors, they were supposed to have the rest of the day off but instead they got this "last minute job". Fixing a water heater is not a quick and easy job- the maintenance workers were busy repairing the heater until 10 o'clock at night. Going past the great inconvenience this was to my family; this was also very unfair to the workers themselves. They deserve to be told in advance of the things they need to do, so they can do it properly.

Throughout this whole time, the workers themselves were cooperating well. Together they worked for hours in the back of my family's Lanai trying to complete a task they had little to no notice about. They apologized for being late and explained their supervisor's act of telling them on the spot.

I really do appreciate everything your company does for me, but I feel that communication amongst those in your work staff is something that should be improved. My community depends on your company for many of their residential needs- how your company functions as a whole has an enormous effect on the lives of the residents themselves.

Thanks for your time,

Brianna M. Martin-Ortega